a602408301 发表于 2011-4-6 17:56   只看TA 51楼
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老马抬头(2011-4-6 18:33): 还请具体认真回复
剧情有点老套,不够新颖,性爱方面描写也不够!
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cdma0422 发表于 2012-1-28 15:39   只看TA 52楼

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情节想的不错,就是把人物写的太浅显,好像过家家一样了。
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lc12345 发表于 2012-4-21 22:31   只看TA 53楼
故事情节有些乱.而且脱离现实.以现实为题材的小说.就要真实性强一些才好看整个文章都是淫欲的味道,都是在幻想,而且文章构思不太合常理,让人就觉得一切都是虚伪。
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lcl10096 发表于 2012-5-2 00:01   只看TA 54楼

楼主写的非常好!支持楼主1:excellence

楼主写的非常好!支持楼主1
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lucky1234567 发表于 2013-3-28 12:09   只看TA 55楼
整体故事情节感觉不真实,过度的实在是太快了
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